Rough board gag.

[Juice]

sorry they're so ridiculously rough. but here's a gag from the viking film.
and i know in the one running scene i switch screen direction, don't worry, if the gag makes it in, I'll fix that.

[dreesh]

Justin:

I like it! A lot! It hits the punchline so fast that you don't really see it coming, and that makes it twice as funny. Good opportunity for change of expression also. I say keep it.

--Adrian

[april]

I feel kinda weird about the 7th board though..i think it's something about the camera direction and size of the character compare to the one before and one after..

[Juice]

Don't worry, that's a scanner issue, they're all the same.

[kellbell]

Hey justin, this is truly funny. Nice work putting his sillouette in the forgeound in the reveal board. I like it.

[Jen]

Justin - I think the gag works great!! I think a big shark should rise up and eat that dude's arm right when he's looking out there. Now stupid nitpicky things..... I think maybe when the lifesaver is thrown into the shot you'd want him to react there, and then cut to a closeup, not a medium shot. (sorry stupid nitpick) Also at the beginning you might want to compose the shot so the viking is at the crest of a hill, instead of sitting on the beach. (you probably aren't even thinking about composition at this point...... I am annoying...)

[Juice]

Thanks guys. Jen, tell me anything you want to tell me, no, I'm not really worried about comp right now, like I said there is that shot where I have to fix the screen direction, but cutting the to close up, that heps. Thanks again, I think I'm gonna try and get another of the gags up today. I don't know if it's working.

Thanks again everyone!

[CaptainObvious]

that's sweet justin! Can you... make the images smaller next time? It was hard to read. but overall, i got the gag clear. is that going to be in the film?

[lissa]

good stuff justin! how long's it going to be this year?

[Juice]

First of Ed, no...bigger is better.

Second, I have no Idea lissa, i'd like 2 mins but i'm thinking more like 3.

I'm tempted to try something else even simpler. this is the simplest gag in the film....another involves a coconut bra and crabs!!

[popmation]

awesome gag.. it reads really well

I think you can use the Viking theme a bit stronger tho.. in this gag him being a Viking doesn't add anything to the gag.. you could switch it to a business man stranded on a island and you wouldn't change the structure of it at all..

as Brad would say.. "use the whole buffalo"..